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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 14:39:56 GMT -5
"Supernova" by Murdoc
The beginning of this one was sweet. Murdoc talking about titles and winning the Deadly Rumble and the Year of Murdoc. It seemed a bit out of character for Murdoc, who doesn't strike me as the materialistic sort, but it was believable nonetheless. And then BAM! The swerve!
... FUCK THAT.
There's the Murdoc we know and love! Turns out, he's not worried about titles, wins, or accolades. Instead, he's going to take Sadistic downtown to Chinatown! The "melted-cheese face skin" was a disgusting visual! The audio/visual out of sync was a nice touch as was the image of Murdoc dragging Sadistic to Hell by the hair. I knew an Aussie that tried to do that once. The "lighter fluid venom" line was badass. As if Murdoc weren't scary enough, now he's completely lost his mind! Goal: Keep as many bodies as possible between Sadistic and Murdoc. And who is the woman that has come to visit Murdoc at the end of the piece? Some new trollop to replace Eira, I presume. Good, intense stuff.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 15:00:58 GMT -5
"Fidelity" by Stacy Jones
It's official! Stacy and Derek sittin' in a tree! It's been awhile since PCW has had an on-screen couple. Wonder how this will translate to the Deadly Rumble. Derek woke her up with something pointy? He must have been solving crosswords with a #2 pencil in bed again...
I know I don't speak for everyone, but I'm personally not a huge fan of in-your-face swearing or sexual situations. That said, it wasn't too bad. Especially after seeing a giant, bouncing, demon penis in one of Saniti's other threads. The revelation that Seth is sexually open-minded and that Cosmos may have possibly been involved with him really threw a monkey wrench into things. Seth talking about wearing the really tight speedos cracked me up. There is a really interesting dynamic forming between Stacy, Seth, and Cosmos. And PCW now has some salacious gossip to talk about.
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Post by Grimm on Dec 5, 2014 15:06:15 GMT -5
I know I've been a real turd the past two shows about getting feedback up. I shall double my efforts! I think you've remedied that. Well done. |
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 15:13:15 GMT -5
"You Ever Dance With The Devil in the Pale Moonlight???" by Mr. Showtime
TL;DR
Ha ha ha! Joking. I love the Joker-inspired title to this one. So Mikey goes back to his old stomping grounds: Hollywood! Really like how you delved into the perils of being a professional wrestler and the toll it takes, but you decided to return despite all of that. Kinda romanticized the business a bit, which is cool. I really like how out of the Black Hand, Showtime is the one that questions our purpose. The psychology of the Black Hand going into the Deadly Rumble as a cohesive unit makes the group look like a force to be reckoned with. I agree that given Showtime's charisma, popularity, and skills on the mic, he should be the mouthpiece of the Black Hand. And now you've got a list of marked men. I wonder who they could be...
Excellent PPV-quality RP. Good luck, brother in the name of cause.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 15:27:23 GMT -5
"Prologue: He Comes" by Seth Archer
I must admit I was a bit worried after reading the title to this one, but it was kept very tame. This was a fine introductory piece for Seth. It succeeding in portraying Seth's personality as well as his background without reading like a dossier. Seth dating the son AND daughter of a mayor simultaneously was pretty funny. Aside from its shortness, this was a good opening salvo.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 5, 2014 22:55:28 GMT -5
The Black Hand: Origins by the Cake Guy
You know, a lot of the time I spend wondering if I've used too little detail in my roleplays. Then I go back, add some more, and ponder if I've used too MUCH detail in describing something. I always do this, worrying that I haven't 'described the chair' with the right amount of balance. You, on the other hand, perplex me. You don't use staggering amounts of written detail to tell me what's going on in the scene, but I can just imagine it and it's just as vivid. That's a compliment; lots of times I'll read someone else's work and they don't set the scene enough for me to really understand what's going on. You can achieve that and give me a full view of what's going on around you with the minimal amount of filler words. That's very impressive.
If I were to have a gripe about this piece, it would be the multiple segments. I understand that they flowed well together and it's not even that big of a black mark, but at times I felt that while I could picture the scene itself, by the time I was immersed in it, it had changed to something else. Also, the match relevance was thrown in at the end almost haphazardly; but that's probably just me and my efedding background, where addressing your opponent one of the most important parts of the roleplay. Granted, I've moved away from that to more of a storytelling version of writing, but it's just instinct for me to look for what wrestler A has to say about wrestler B.
All in all, fuck you. It was a really good piece, and for that I hate you.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 23:43:15 GMT -5
The Black Hand: Origins by the Cake Guy You know, a lot of the time I spend wondering if I've used too little detail in my roleplays. Then I go back, add some more, and ponder if I've used too MUCH detail in describing something. I always do this, worrying that I haven't 'described the chair' with the right amount of balance. You, on the other hand, perplex me. You don't use staggering amounts of written detail to tell me what's going on in the scene, but I can just imagine it and it's just as vivid. That's a compliment; lots of times I'll read someone else's work and they don't set the scene enough for me to really understand what's going on. You can achieve that and give me a full view of what's going on around you with the minimal amount of filler words. That's very impressive. If I were to have a gripe about this piece, it would be the multiple segments. I understand that they flowed well together and it's not even that big of a black mark, but at times I felt that while I could picture the scene itself, by the time I was immersed in it, it had changed to something else. Also, the match relevance was thrown in at the end almost haphazardly; but that's probably just me and my efedding background, where addressing your opponent one of the most important parts of the roleplay. Granted, I've moved away from that to more of a storytelling version of writing, but it's just instinct for me to look for what wrestler A has to say about wrestler B. All in all, fuck you. It was a really good piece, and for that I hate you. The Cake Guy accepts a compliment that only Whitey could give. Thank you, sir. |
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Post by Mr. Showtime on Dec 6, 2014 0:07:55 GMT -5
I'd exalt you for this feedback, but you know Stormm. Great feedback for someone who deserved it
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 6, 2014 0:14:57 GMT -5
"No Karma" by Justin "Stormm" Michaels
I thought it was really rude of Stormmy to strip us of the privilege to exalt and/or smite. He might be the worst person I know; at the very least, the worst person on this forum. I wish him testicular pain while he tries to sleep tonight, and may God have mercy on his soul.
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Post by Stormm on Dec 6, 2014 19:12:15 GMT -5
Oh, so it's now my fault for taking karma away in the first place?! You know what, that's fine with me; because...
I'm the graphics guy PCW deserves, but not the one it needs right now. So you'll hunt me. Because I can take it. Because I'm not your graphics guy... I'm a silent designer. A watchful creator. The Force of Nature!
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Post by Nathan Saniti on Dec 6, 2014 19:49:06 GMT -5
Oh, so it's now my fault for taking karma away in the first place?! You know what, that's fine with me; because... I'm the graphics guy PCW deserves, but not the one it needs right now. So you'll hunt me. Because I can take it. Because I'm not your graphics guy... I'm a silent designer. A watchful creator. The Force of Nature! Thanks, Bruce Vain |
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Post by A Ghost in the Wind on Dec 7, 2014 8:32:31 GMT -5
Oh, so it's now my fault for taking karma away in the first place?! You know what, that's fine with me; because... I'm the graphics guy PCW deserves, but not the one it needs right now. So you'll hunt me. Because I can take it. Because I'm not your graphics guy... I'm a silent designer. A watchful creator. The Force of Nature! Thanks, Bruce Vain  |
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Post by Nathan Saniti on Dec 7, 2014 12:05:24 GMT -5
Now that's just awesome. Stormm, you need to make a banner out of that for yourself. LOL
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Post by Stormm on Dec 7, 2014 14:25:03 GMT -5
It's being used as an alternate form of contact information for myself. I made and posted that image in the last 2 handler contacts threads for that purpose, but the Havoc Signal hardly gets used.  Though, a sig banner out of it doesn't sound like a horrible idea either! Been meaning to maybe make a new banner and avatar, but haven't had any really great ideas to use in making a new one yet. |
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