Post by Alexa Black on Feb 16, 2016 3:27:23 GMT -5
Friends In Dark Places - Part Two: ...Of Being Earnest
What a great RP NCM! I like the way you describe things
And they way you bring a sense of urgency with your
story telling
Things like
The melancholia surrounding the arena that night was no ordinary malaise, it was the aftermath of a great unrest. It was the moment when an entire cohort recognised in earnest that an evil had become too unruly to ignore. Then again, I should have known. Wasn't that what Altman had tried to tell me weeks earlier?
And showing the aftermath of Kelli's run in with me
And Nathan's reaction was cool too. I messed up Kelli pretty bad.
And I liked this too
At one time I had thought that only The Black Hand could provoke such hate from a person, but no longer. They were self-destructing and PCW was once against safe from their devious machinations, but one person had taken their place.
It acknowledges that an impact has been made and people are taking notice which is good.
I look forward to your next piece
What a great RP NCM! I like the way you describe things
And they way you bring a sense of urgency with your
story telling
Things like
The melancholia surrounding the arena that night was no ordinary malaise, it was the aftermath of a great unrest. It was the moment when an entire cohort recognised in earnest that an evil had become too unruly to ignore. Then again, I should have known. Wasn't that what Altman had tried to tell me weeks earlier?
And showing the aftermath of Kelli's run in with me
And Nathan's reaction was cool too. I messed up Kelli pretty bad.
And I liked this too
At one time I had thought that only The Black Hand could provoke such hate from a person, but no longer. They were self-destructing and PCW was once against safe from their devious machinations, but one person had taken their place.
It acknowledges that an impact has been made and people are taking notice which is good.
I look forward to your next piece
