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Post by Arsen Goodstone on Aug 28, 2018 8:38:51 GMT -5
Dominator- Wow, man, I'm impressed. I had gone back to fully read your RtG piece, and I'm glad I did because it made this piece so much more clear. I really enjoyed the story arc being presented, and you made the emotions really jump off the page. I'm glad someone finally made the Arsen-Arson connection too, I was waiting for it. My only gripe isn't anything you could have helped, I just felt in the dark about a lot of Dominator's story, and since the piece had a lot of history in it I lost some of the effect. But like I said, you couldn't have helped that; you can't be expected to bring people up to speed every time time you write. I did check your profile, and there wasn't any mention of the Chronological Order (unless I missed it.) Maybe add in a summary or description for new people so they know whats up?
Either way, well done. You showed why you're the champion.
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Post by Dominator / Mortimer on Aug 28, 2018 10:30:04 GMT -5
Thanks brother.
The 'continuous story arc' style of RPs is something that I've discussed before on the boards. It is somewhat by design, so that people DO actually go back to previous works so that they can fully pick up on certain plot points, but I do attempt to remind people of certain plot-points throughout without going overboard.
But I can see your point. For someone who hasn't been around since the story first started, I can see where someone walking into the fray might be a little confused. And whilst all of the details surrounding The Chronological Order has yet to fully surface, perhaps I should put up a short synopsis in my bio for people to read.
For some reason, I get a real 'Peaky Blinders' vibe from your RPs. I can picture the scene in my head. There is enough gritty detail in there to convey the messages that you want to get across and I've a feeling this is going to be a real close one for the judges to call.
Excellent stuff, Mr. Goodstone!
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Post by Arsen Goodstone on Aug 28, 2018 13:06:10 GMT -5
Well, Goodstone IS represented by Alfie Solomon. I started the character with the Peaky Blinders vibe in mind, and now that I've gotten somewhat of a foothold I can flesh it out into something more. I'm hoping it's a close bout, I think it was my best writing to date as Arsen, but if anything at least I can move forward with a better direction.
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Post by Dominator / Mortimer on Aug 28, 2018 18:29:44 GMT -5
Well, Goodstone IS represented by Alfie Solomon. I started the character with the Peaky Blinders vibe in mind I rest my case.
Side Note: I'm an idiot and didn't even put two and two together considering Alife Solomon is your picbase…
I need a beer... or a sandwich... or a beer sandwich.
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Post by Gerard Angelo on Aug 29, 2018 0:25:07 GMT -5
I need a beer... or a sandwich... or a beer sandwich.
What is this mythical beer sandwich you speak of? |
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Post by Dominator / Mortimer on Aug 30, 2018 13:50:25 GMT -5
I need a beer... or a sandwich... or a beer sandwich.
What is this mythical beer sandwich you speak of? It's just like any ordinary sandwich... Except it's got beer in it. ... And you have a beer while you eat it. ... And you soak the bread in beer... ... And instead of spreading butter, you spread... Well, you get the idea. |
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