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Post by Holden Ross on Jun 15, 2019 23:07:33 GMT -5
i posted in the "around the arena" thread. a different style for me. more like a book or story format.
i know its not long. different for me. whatcha think?
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Post by The Anarchist on Jun 16, 2019 10:50:45 GMT -5
I thought it was a good first effort with the style. There are spots that could use an edit (no biggie), but the general idea was easy to follow.
This:
Stephanie shakes her head. “Nope. Your asshole. Your mess.”
And this:
That fat, flying bastard, Cupid, sure has a sense of humor at times….
Gave me a chuckle lol. The style will get easier to do as you become more comfortable with it. I like what you did overall, though 👍.
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