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Post by A Ghost in the Wind on Aug 25, 2008 12:47:23 GMT -5
As a result of trying to keep the rp threads singular post, I deleted NCM's second post and pasted its contents here. The following contains those contents.
Link to Roleplay
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Post by Pegasus on Aug 26, 2008 0:29:11 GMT -5
Well... umm... awesome, if I do say so myself. You've come a long long ways from the way you were writing when you first started.
With that being said, I did find the RP to be quite entertaining. For those that remember NCM from his first run through, I think they'll find that this will easily help the transition from what he was into what he is now. For those that are new, I think it gives them enough info to give some decent background to NCM. Either way, it was written quite well.
On the downside, I did notice some small errors, and others may notice more. It was mainly just punctuation type things though, and nothing that would kill your RP, but it obviously wouldn't help it either. I really hope some of the other members step forward too as I know they will be able to spot things that I may have missed or neglected. So... yea, have at it. And nice work again Rick... very nice.
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Post by Grimm on Aug 26, 2008 16:09:31 GMT -5
Description is important, but you don't have to go out of your way to describe every single little thing. It can be distracting sometimes. One example would be the "sporadically pitted forehead".
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Post by Heavy Metal on Aug 27, 2008 1:09:23 GMT -5
I know I struggle with this. A lot.
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