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Post by Grimm on Jun 28, 2015 18:37:58 GMT -5
I've only scanned the posts thus far, so I can't provide any real worthwhile feedback, but I would like to say...
The Great Hunt: Judge and Jury - This isn't much of a comment, but I personally think "When Cory found his voice it was dry like firewood and full of hurt," is an excellent sentence.
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Post by Gem on Jun 28, 2015 19:00:33 GMT -5
I haven't had much time to be on with my new job, but I want to thank everyone for providing me with a safe space where I can vent a story based on real events. I hope it hasn't been over the line as far as content goes.
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Post by The Anarchist on Jun 28, 2015 19:53:39 GMT -5
It's not as far as I'm concerned. You gave me a laugh with the "hooker vulture" remark. Just wanted to mention that. I wasn't here when you began writing as Gem, so I'll have to go back and catch up. But I have read everything since my return  |
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Post by Barry Kemp on Jul 4, 2015 0:09:08 GMT -5
Just a bit of Feedback for Dan (Barry)... when your character is at a bar drinking and talking to the bartender... it's kind of weird to have her ask if he's been drinking since he was fired from his last company... Just saying... DOH! |
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Post by Judge on Jul 4, 2015 13:01:40 GMT -5
To my opponents good luck. We didn't have a lot to go on about each other but we all rped and put out good pieces! Its not much im usually not a feedback guy, i enjoyed all our work.
Now I'm conspiring with Jury with two big segments for 175....stay tuned
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Post by Gem on Jul 5, 2015 8:16:41 GMT -5
Just a bit of Feedback for Dan (Barry)... when your character is at a bar drinking and talking to the bartender... it's kind of weird to have her ask if he's been drinking since he was fired from his last company... Just saying... DOH! Major props for the IT Crowd reference. |
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