Trauma 180 RP Feedback

[Grimm]

All work and no play makes Nate a dull boy, etc., etc.

[Judge]

Just what the heck is going in between The Unholy Alliance (The Anarchist and Loco)? Good job to both of you guys on your RPs this cycle liked them both, really kept asking myself WTF.

My RP of the cycle goes to Mr. Showtime it was a great piece brodingo.

Glad to see all the action from everyone and the show will as always be the tits. Good word to all!

[The Anarchist]

Oct 17, 2015 16:33:15 GMT -5 Judge said:

Just what the heck is going in between The Unholy Alliance (The Anarchist and Loco)? Good job to both of you guys on your RPs this cycle liked them both, really kept asking myself WTF.

My RP of the cycle goes to Mr. Showtime it was a great piece brodingo.

Glad to see all the action from everyone and the show will as always be the tits. Good word to all!

I'd really like to give a straight answer, but then I'd play spoiler. I wrote a segment for Trauma that will...well, it'll be a definitive answer. I'll just preface by saying it's my doing, in regards to the question. But I appreciate your feedback. I generally can't stand what I write, but I liked this one. No writer's block this time lol.

Feedback as a whole I've started on. I read the rp's from beginning to end and comment as I go, so it tends to get long (sorry guys!). I'm up to Grimm's, so once I cover everyone (or attempt to), my feedback will get posted. Unless I post in parts, which is always possible.

[The Anarchist]

Ok, here's batch #1.

Feeding Time: Boy does she have it out for Kelli Starr or what? I love the intensity of Alexa's anger as it pertains to Dollface. You can feel just how badly she wants to bash her into a pile of skittles, and then smash those into a sugary, rainbow colored mess. The twitter feud earlier in the week helped further things. I look forward to the day when the two square off. Well, if it ever comes to pass.

My favorite line in your RP was, "I will do things to her that are so unspeakably evil that they will be whispered in frightened tones horrifying even those who inhabit the deepest depths of hell."

It just really drives the stake through Dracula's heart on how BADLY she wants Kelli, and what she plans on doing to her. It's a nice bit of emotion.

The other thing that stood out was Alexa's frustration boiling over with (un)Stable, and in particular how being a member has changed who she was. "It's got me nowhere and left me feeling like a hamster in a wheel. I'm not being true to myself and I've been running on lies for too long." That's just well put. Seems like the stable is in trouble, so I'll be curious to see how it all plays out with each show.

Good work, Simon. Which leads me to your other character.

Norikoeru: Looks like The Black Hand has another combatant that wants to remove them (lol). The backstory in this was good. It helped further the character, and explained how/why Hiroshi got into Sumo wrestling. Nicely done. "I will show him that though I am not a violent person by nature I will not allow myself to be walked over." What I like there, is the acknowledgment that he isn't violent. The division is predicated on it, so Yukio will have to adjust. Should be interesting to see how the big man does in that environment.

No Rest for the Wicked/In The Lord's Fold: Good ol Judge. One of my favorite characters in PCW. Right off, I love the quote used at the start of this. I dug the use of a radio show for this. It was a different setting and worked well for the overall narrative. The mention of being a "radical Christian" rocked. It explains who Judge is all in two words. The follow to it, "Plus were on camera I can't hurt you with people watching!" and then to have Judge laugh like a wild hyena, makes you think he COULD if he so wanted. Of course that's just my pov. I liked it.

I was glad that the mental breakdown angle got brought into this. The expression change from Judge was excellent. Which again, I think blends well to what I quoted. Judge could have snapped at the mere mention of what transpired, but he managed to find a way to keep himself from becoming violent. On that note, I love this budding rivalry that seems to have happened between Judge/Jury and Tide/Wasp. It fits nicely with the war between Braddock/Bubba. Could you imagine a six man tag, but with Underground rules?? Yikes. I'm sure I've said it before, but I love Judge in the Underground.

The fans tweets were fun to read. I liked the calm explanations. Being younger, that hunger often found with such. The remark about the blending of souls, and then crediting TUHA. I cracked up over being referred to as old, lol. Especially given The Anarchist isn't the oldest in PCW, but in general I laughed. Being singled out gave me a smile. But Judge going off over being laughed at was a nice touch. Something finally upset him. Nicely done.

I'll be VERY interested in seeing how a Judge/Jury v Revelation or Crazy Power match goes, should you guys advance. There seems to be a working relationship with The Hand of some kind on one side, and then a pair of opponents who would also fit nicely in the Underground...only it would be a traditional tag (like that'll stop violence from happening).

The final portion was awesome. I loved the dancing in fire, and especially his wife as a ballerina spinning into it. Which changed to his children and then the Underground title. "The intense heat was suddenly gone. Judge opened his eyes finding himself knelt down in the corner of a ring, in the middle was the Underground title..." I cut it off there because I really liked this visual. Your rematch is going to be one for the ages I believe.

Onto Jury. Yep. Right off I loved the description of Judge's face. "Judge was clearly broken from his loss at Deadly Intentions and he wore his crimson mask still as a reminder, his eyes were glazed over from the chair shots, color drained from his face from his brutal time in the Deadly Rumble, and still yet he managed to crack a smile from his swollen lips." Awesome.

I'm REALLY curious to see what happens with the massacre in Kentucky and especially as it pertains to "he has left a call sign on the bodies in the shape of a hand, a black hand." Pretty interesting. I can just imagine how that'll go over in Hangtown.

Like with Yukio, I appreciated the backstory use. "I'm going to be a real and honest wrestler" and "I want nothing else but to be loved by the fans as they chant my name all around the world." stood out. Especially as it gets followed with Jury's emotion on the memory. It was a strong follow up (imo). I'm running long on this, so I'll abruptly stop. However,  I'll end by saying both of your efforts were really good. Keep going strong!

[The Anarchist]

Batch #2

Blue moon of Kentucky: Congrats again on winning the Rumble! I was checking out the title histories the other day, and it hadn't donned on me just how much Grimm has actually accomplished. That's a feather in your cap, and one that draws nothing but praise from me. You're one of the best writers here and I think there could be a new World Champion come the next PPV. Major props, Nate.

Ok. The RP itself. Before I really get long winded, I really really like the insight on The Black Hand and just what they are about. I wasn't here when it started, so I only have been going on the last few months, what others say and then looking at previous shows. I'll have to check out old RP's as well, to really get a better understanding. The opening paragraph was great. Very honest, as Grimm had to win the Deadly Rumble to get the title of Number One contender. It's like you wrote, "This time, there could be no discussion. No debate." Thumbs up.

I'm sure I have mentioned this previously, but I really appreciate the descriptiveness that goes into your rp's. I visualize as I read, and the extra things help make that easier. This actually felt like a change of pace for you. I don't have to bust out a dictionary this week LOL, and I mean that as a compliment. I'm no whiz with words, so there are certainly selections that I have to look up to see what the meaning is. You are to English, what Bill Nye is to Science (Grimm! Grimm! Grimm! yeah, I could totally see it). Back on point though. I LOVED this bit, "Justin still struggled to reconcile his way through the labyrinth that was his past. To find and slay his minotaur." As a fan of Greek mythology, that was a nice reference choice.

And what followed really explained things: "The Black Hand again, pulling strings and putting on puppet shows of our struggles and redemptions. Or so it would like you to think." Jumping further ahead, you wrote "For months the federation has been little more than one big kerfuffle about bringing down the Black Hand. Thing is...has anyone stopped to ask themselves Why, exactly?. Does the fact we've given it a name make it more official, and does that scare them more? Because the idea of an organization somehow gives them a framework, a method to what some would consider our madness. But I would say to them, look around you. Nothing's changed. If you're a miserable sinner in one shape, you're a miserable sinner in another." Nicely stated. The Hand believes they are good and just in what they do. Which I think, really...plays well into the reception for Saniti/Sadistic at Deadly Intentions. Again, it helps me understand things better.

The interaction between Grimm and his sister with the pumpkin carving was fun. Gotta love Halloween.

Revelation is going to be an interesting watch in the tourney, and especially if they become Number one contenders. I'm assuming the title match would be at the next PPV, so it could be a HUGE night for The Black Hand, and one in which they possess nearly every single title.

Great piece of writing, Nate. I really do enjoy what you put out.

The Warden of Wayward Souls:: Chapter XX: I love the roman numeral use in your rp titles. Adds a nice touch. I liked how you used the same announcement of Grimm winning the Rumble, and then in between, add Stormm's mindset as it happened.

Actually, the early parts of this was a nice continuation. Just from your perspective as to the activity in Grimm's RP. I dug the "backwoods utopia" description. Very fitting.

Honesty was the name of the game, and "Despite any influence the Black Hand might have, there is something to be said about individuals who will always shoot straight with you. The same cannot be said for most of the Pure Class Wrestling roster. That was ultimately what drew the Force of Nature to the Black Hand's side." shines light on WHY Michaels would find himself in Hangtown. Again, I don't have a firm grasp of what led to the eventual turn, but it's things like I quoted that helps me chip away at it.

Ah twins. Several of the characters have em, lol. Good thing PCW doesn't run a daycare. I laughed at the interaction between Justin and Lindsay. "No, just wondering how much longer her majesty needed to get all pretty this morning?" My sister is guilty of this, so I know EXACTLY how Michael's feels lol.

"It had been some time since the couple had been able to joke back and forth without an argument trailing close behind. They had been through some really rough pastures together, but they still had each other, the twins, and their health. Everything else would eventually fall in to place, or so they hoped" Just something I liked.

WOO Kaden Calix!

LOL! "Yes, even if it's scary britches!" omg. I wonder if that'll carry through with Grimm during shows. Funny as heck.

This was a really fun read, Justin. Revelation is going to be a tough draw for anyone, be it the champions or the tournament teams. Two thumbs up, bro.

Contracts, How Do Those Work?: I loved reading this. I laughed at certain things, all of which I'll reference below, alone with favorite sections.

Ow.

Ow.

Fuckity ow!

"He could only watch in stunned disbelief as Michael Wryght, the possible future leader of the free world and guy who apparently couldn't understand simple directions disappeared with his ill-gotten gold."

"Justin looked at his remaining two competitors, both of whom looked absolutely murderous. He briefly toyed with the idea of going for a quick roll up but prudence and common sense talked him out of it. Besides, there was no referee to make the count anymore and there were certainly much easier ways of committing suicide. Flinging oneself at a wood chipper genitals first, for example."

"Justin looked over his shoulder. If murder wore a face, it was wearing the face of Sean Rhodes." I pictured Leatherface for a second lol. "That was all the excuse Justin needed to excuse himself from the ring."

The interaction with Eira was really good. She's intimidating, angry and not someone you'd want after you. So the reaction of Kaard (and especially how uncomfortable he seemed) was awesome.

"Me, dangerous?" Eira drawled sarcastically, "Why I'm a pussy cat," she practically purred.

"Yeah, so is a panther," Kaard said giving her spiked knee brace a pointed stare.

Murder thy name is Mentis. I laughed more than I probably should have at that.

"High school girls had nothing on PCW when it came to gossip and rumors." now what followed is something I personally agree with. "What was the surprise was the number of people actually cheering for Sadistic, PCW was a fairly simple place. It liked its bad guys bad and its good guys good." That's where Grimm and Showtime's RP's really fit nicely with Kaard's statement. Two sides of the coin.

As much as I disliked how the four way ended at DI, my enthusiasm carries over to the triple threat this week. Getting Kaard's perspective on the contract mumbo jumbo works and works really well. I like the realism of it. "In Justin's eyes it shouldn't have been that hard; you'd think the contract of the parent company would override a personal contract. So by that logic they should just take the International away and award him the North American. But that's why Justin was a wrestler and not a lawyer. Stable hours, non-life threatening position, no jumping off of things; no thank you, who would want a life like that?"

Fuck yes! A Weird Al mention.

"That depends on who's asking. Do I owe you money? Cause if I do then no, this is Justin Card, one 'a' and a 'c', easy mistake to make." hahaha.

Great stuff, Tom.  

[The Anarchist]

Batch #3 (The last of them)

Message From A Fool: Sure seems to be a lot of anger (justifiably so) coming from Crazy Power. Not just individually, but as it pertains to the direction of (un)Stable and as it pertains to The Black Hand. Well, in Alexa's case, wanting to destroy Kelli Starr and question Nathan Saniti. It makes for interesting reads. This little piece right here, "(un)Stable is becoming useless, Alexa Black is becoming useless, everything is becoming useless. I am tempted to just throw everything away and just do everything on my own once again." yields some really good emotion. I liked the insight, especially as it's followed with "But I'm not."

Patience is wearing thin it seems, and as Crazy Power is booked to take on Revelation ("which is two members of The Black Hand, disguised under a fake name"), you have to wonder if not only they can continue to keep focused on the goal, or if they will have a go at each other instead. Especially when Crazy Boy calls her out.

"She has to be the biggest fool of all to team with me. I will continue to team with her, because I am forced to, but she is starting to walk on real thin ice with me." It's a fair retort, as Alexa has had some remarks of her own for CB. If it does come to pass, I'd love to see the former members in the Underground division, as I think their personalities would be perfectly at home there. Tyrone is mad at Alexa, Alexa wants to destroy Kelli Starr, both question Nathan Saniti. Crazy Boy is awesome though. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens after Trauma is over. Good stuff overall!

The Order Of Things - Part One: Gimme Shelter: First thing I thought of was the Rolling Stones song. Before I delve into the RP, I wanted to congratulate Rick for not only being spotlighted on the latest edition of Pulse, but to also commend him for the awesome job he does in portraying mental illness, in this instance schizophrenia. I can't remember exactly how Kris put it, but she was absolutely correct. Kudos to you, good sir.

I feel for the participants of the Four Way. Out of that controversy, comes round two in the form of a triple threat, that SHOULD have a definitive winner. I'd be surprised if there wasn't. But given everyone involved, the chemistry is incredible to see from an in-ring perspective. RP speaking you know everyone will bring it, so my excitement for the match carries over from the PPV to Trauma. I like Sean's participation with The Order. I think it adds an extra dynamic for NCM to be involved with, plus, c'mon; Non Compos Mentis AND Eira?

I actually feel like I'm right there in New York, with the way it gets described each time in NCM writings. This is one of my favorite parts, and I think it puts things into perspective with the confusion fallout: "But the referee hadn't covered himself in glory, either. He'd thrown himself into a mire with his explanation that certain among us had understood but others, clearly, hadn't. The bell should never have rung. It had, and what happened was an unmitigated disaster. Then Frank Foley had a hand in the farce by not immediately calling the match null and void. To allow that affront, it was a sacrilege to the title he had stolen, MY title."

What followed was even better. "Eira had lost her North American title fairly, of that there was little doubt, but what else had been taken? She had lost an opportunity at redemption, a chance to regain some pride and gold. Justin Kaard had lost nothing but his fast-earned dual title shot, a chance it was hard to make a justification for him getting in the first place. And me?" "A potential fifth North American title. An International Title I hadn't defended yet. The indignity of being embarrassed by a joke Presidential candidate and his reckless abandonment of the rules. A mockery of everything I'd fought for to be able to rip that title from the hands of the Black Hand, then to watch it spirited away back into their fold."

I love how both pieces come together and really sell the importance of the match, the controversy that happened, and most importantly, the significance of the titles. That's some great stuff there. Little things like that are appreciated. NCM is going to be out for redemption. I loved your work this cycle. This was a really good read. Like with the others, I can't wait to see the next chapter.

The Infiniti Council - Prelude to Infiniti: Right off, you had ooc written about not having time and energy at the same time. Completely understandable. I don't think your work suffered from it, it's just shorter than usual. But with a more than valid reason, it's not a big issue.

I actually made reference to how the crowd reacted to your match in my News and Rumors bit, and I was really curious to see how Nathan would feel about them reacting that way. Well, I got it. lol. "The audience had gotten a taste of the demon as Nathan let slack the tether that restrained it at Deadly Intentions against Billy "Sadistic" Dillinger. They didn't like it one bit." Yep. When I read that happening, I was all, "woah, wait a second here. They are BOOING Saniti??" That also got brought up on Pulse. "Nathan had left the land of give-a-damn behind long ago in his quest to quiet the Phenom's reign of terror." Hey, gotta do what you gotta do, right? The triangle between Sadistic-Kelli-Saniti has been compelling every step of the way. A triple threat match would be VERY interesting. But I love the chemistry you, Kris and Josh all have amongst one another. I wasn't here when you first started, but I was impressed by what I had read prior to signing back up. Nathan Saniti is one of my favorite characters here, and your writing for his stories are very creative and layered. Awesome work. It may be short, but it's effective!

Boys and their toys: I love Bubba in the Underground division. His all out war with Braddock make for some great reads. I hope that rivalry continues. You had a nice rundown of your three opponents (where the heck is Marc and Ezra at?), and a catchy line towards the end, "Don't be late boys and don't forget your toys!" That could be the division catchphrase lol. I wonder if the cheese grader will make itself known again? Kidding aside, I liked your RP.

You Cut Deep!!!: And here we have the future President, should Bernie Sanders fail to capture it. I love the political slant with Mr. Showtime. Like Grimm, I appreciate the small explanations of who The Hand is, as it helps me better understand them as a whole. "No one has preached the righteousness of the Black Hand more loudly than "Mr. Showtime" Michael Wryght. Time and again he's shouted that they are the heroes in this crazy mixed up world. Though never denying their mission was to destroy the present to make way for a better future." That's a campaign slogan waiting to happen.

Then there's this: "Deadly Intentions was no different. Again it was put in his corner to right the wrongs of the wicked. Rhodes and Eira were the definitions of villains. Two people that embodied evil, but trick the public in thinking they are better than they are. Kaard was always the adipoma of privileged, never earning his own. If everyone didn't see that Showtime was the clear face of the four-some then there was something seriously wrong." I loved how all of that got put.

His challenging of Foley was fantastic. As was his insistence that he should have won both titles with one single pinfall. It's a nice continuation over the controversy of the match, and an explanation that gave me a bit of a laugh. I can just picture Showtime's arrogance dripping with each word spoken. The details behind the contracts again, made me laugh. Showtime makes quite a convincing case for himself, doesn't he? Great character nuances. First Foley gets called Francis, and then Frankland. Hahaha.

"What is Saniti going to do? Pull a rabbit out of his ass?" hahahaha.

I LOVED Showtime's reaction to the "insult" of going on second. "Heavens no, you monster." and then to follow it up like he had been shot up, was comedy gold. I could picture it happening, every single step of the way. You gave me quite the laugh there Mr. Wryght. Then his true colors showed the second he was out of sight. Foley had struck down Showtime's ego. Really good contrast there. Easily one of my favorites this cycle.

Troubled Times: Apt title for your RP. I think of everyone's output this week, yours may be the trickest for me to give feedback on. The mood was set early, and I especially liked the symbolism of the buoy's ring. This RP has some good foreshadowing, reflection. You convey a veteran face really well. To think, we went from HOA vs Hellfire, to now. Crazy how time flies by, my brother. Not bad for a couple guys from the old Team *USA* group. Or *TUF* as Justin would know it as.

I can't stress enough that The Anarchist and Loco aren't the oldest characters on the roster (I'm looking at you Sadistic, lol). "I am not sure Jase and I are on the same page these days" was a nice bit. This may be short (effort is effort, idc what the rp length is) but I liked it. Good job.

Fuck The Mailman: Congrats on winning the Underground title! Wasp v Judge when the rematch happens, is going to be fun. The RP title is one I think we have all said at one time or another. "You see, while you're worry about a letter that probably just got lost in the mail, you should be turning your anger into something productive. Do you think Hiroshi Yukio is training against cardboard boxes and envelopes? The guy is clearly training on Big Macs and Triple Thick Chocolate Milkshakes" lol. As I mentioned in feedback for your opponent, I'll be interested in seeing how Yukio fares this week. Especially as Wasp is a speedy guy.

Hahaha grudge match with The Mailman. I can already see the postal jokes for it.

I enjoy the antics of High Tide and Wasp. It's a nice break from some of the other stuff that goes on in PCW. That and it provides some humor, and we all know laughter is awesome.

Awakening 1:2 : I'll have to see my recent chat with Kris is still in my inbox, as I gave her feedback on this there. (I cleared it). I can't remember exactly what I said, but the gist of it was that it was a different setting, tone for an Eira RP. I could really see the interior of the cafe and general dispostiion of the waitress, as I've had experience with both fronts. The "pouring a Murdoc-worthy amount of sugar into the acidic, bitter brew" gave me a chuckle. I'm not sure how much sugar that amounts to, but the general description was funny. OH! the menu. "Picking up a grungy menu to hide behind observe from" was another part that I chuckled over. I can just see it, and especially with how Eira looks, as opposed to the other patrons.

"All of whom were still staring at her."  

Given everything going on, this was a really good RP I felt. I wish I had kept the message in my inbox, because I think the feedback is more thorough there, than it is here (I'm sorry! Don't kill me! ).

This was a darn good cycle I feel, plenty of excellent reads.

[Loki]

Sorry I'm a little late getting this up.

Crossroads by Jason Willard
I really enjoy the first part. Willard perfectly portrays the weary warrior, someone who’s ready to stop fighting but knows there’s more to do. Though I did laugh at him telling Kelli to be quiet. I think the one thing that’s bugged me so far is jarring transition between heading to the airport and suddenly waking up in bed the next morning, but that’s minor. I do like his interactions at home though, it’s nice to see PCW people when the cameras are off, so to speak.

Feeding Time by Alexa Black


Now that I’ve had my fun, the review. I know that there’s some history between Alexa and Kelli, but I think you spent too much time in this piece focusing on Kelli and not focusing on your actual opponents. I still want to see Alexa grow more as a character and I don’t feel like this piece accomplished that. It’s not a bad rp by any means, I just don’t think it did much to further your story.

乗り越える Norikoeru by Hiroshi Yukio
First things first, careful with your tenses, I noticed a few times where you would switch from past to present and between first and third person. Pick a tense and narrative and stick with it. It’s nice to finally see a little more story developing in Hiroshi’s rps, I hope you continue with it. And as hard as it can be to do, more match relevance is always a good thing.

No Rest for the Wicked by Judge
I’m curious how Judge goes from being arrested for assaulting fans to being on a talk show talking about PCW? One of the big things you have to watch out for is spelling mistakes. You’ve got a very compelling story over all, I love the idea of PCW having its own inquisitors, but you’ve got to tighten things up.

The Lords Fold by Jury
So one big thing to remember, and I do believe this was similar advice I gave Ezra last week, we in PCW exist outside of WWE/WCW/ETC, think of it like a comic book, you have lots of parallel dimensions were things are just slightly different. Other than that, I had a hard time following this one, it was hard for me to tell what was going on. Now that might just be me, I’m perfectly willing to admit that, but this one didn’t seem to flow as well as the last one. I am curious to learn more about the Man in black though.

Blue Moon of Kentucky by Grimm
Well that’s a rather back handed way to start of an RP. Bonus points for the use of the word kerfuffle, I like how a lot of people are trying to work in fun words to their rp’s. But reading through this entire piece really makes me glad that I’m not competing in the tag division. I love the world of the black hand, I can’t wait to read more.

The Warden of Wayward Souls by Stormm
Nah, Stormms not bitter or anything. But don’t forget, you have actually won the World Title once before. There’s one line in here where you really hit the nail on the head, “Even in everyday living, Phinehas and Ruth managed to make the mundane seem supernatural.” Yes, yes, yaaaaaasssss. I love this line, it hits the nail on the head perfectly and it underscores Stormm’s discomfort with hangtown beautifully. And heh, scary britches. I really feel like your writing has picked up since joining tbh, great job, Justin.

Message from a Fool by Crazy Boy
I’m really glad you held back on the whole mass murder thing. Next step is to take all these things that CB is telling us, about how he’s unstable, how he’s cold and aggressive, show us how he’s uncaring. I invite you to take a step outside your comfort zone, really change up your narrative. More show, less tell. I think that could really do wonders for you.

The Order of Things – Part One by NCM
Jesus Christ, did you write enough words? Also, Godfrey is a brave man to call Eira an uppity battle axe, brave and/or stupid. A little mundane for as long as it was, but it was a very good character building piece. Good job, Ryck Lyfe.

The Infiniti Council by N. Sah-Nee-Tee
You don’t need to apologize for brevity man, lots of words does not a good rp make. Take a look at Grimm, his are generally shorter pieces but it’s the content that matters. This is a good example of that. The meat of the rp does a superb job of showing Nathan’s frustration not only with losing to Sadistic but also being relegated down the card. I’m still confused about his relationship with Kelli though, I can’t tell if he wants to fuck her or fight her…..or both….at the same time…..weird.

Boys and their Toys by Bubba Reece
I enjoy Bubba’s writing, I really do. With a little more tightening I could see him moving up the ladder in no time at all. That said, this was not one of my favorite pieces. It wasn’t bad, but it read more like a shoot piece you’d find on the old MSN boards. I really want to see Bubba develop the character and tell more of a story, but that’s just me. I think with some more development Bubba Reece could turn into a serious threat at any level.

You Cut Deep!!! by Mr. Showtime.
This roleplay sucked and the writer should be stripped of any titles he may or may not possess legally and never be allowed to compete in PCW again!!!!!! But that’s probably not going to happen, so here’s what I really thought. It actually is quite interesting to hear Showtime defend his actions, which I’m glad because with no context the ending of our last match really made him look like a goober. Also, did you mean to call me a fatty tumor? Cause that’s what adipoma means. If you did, screw you.

Troubled Times by Loco
Actor portraying you….wat? Well moving on from that confusing bit, I’ll say what I said for Jason’s bit, I love seeing PCW stars when the camera isn’t on, it’s a refreshing change. It shows a more personal side to the characters, the sides that are a little bit vulnerable and a little bit afraid. Also, I thought polo was the sport of kings? Again, not important. I liked this piece, a little shorter but this seems to be the cycle for shorter pieces.

Fuck the Mailman by Wasp
I went into this one thinking the title referred to Wasp’s theoretical kid’s parentage, but I was very amused to find out otherwise. I’m still trying to figure out if High Tide and Wasp are actually pirates or if it’s all in their heads. I loved High Tide admonishing Wasp for “training” on cardboard boxes and envelopes while his opponent “trained” on cheeseburgers and milkshakes, I laughed at that a little harder than I should have. Good job, mang.

Awakening 1:2 – by Eira
“Squidgy-faced spider monkey” Okay, I laughed. Not your best piece but definitely not your worst, I know you ran into some time crunch stuff, it happens. You still put up a perfectly respectable piece that did what you needed it to do, which was advance your story. You’ve got nothing to be ashamed of with this one.

[Mr. Showtime]

Of course I did Tom...of course I did

[Loki]

Well in that case screw you.

[Judge]

He was released into the custody of his family, they posted his bond. I was going to writ about that but I never saved it

[Loki]

Well then that makes more sense.

[Grimm]

Unless Josh steps up, he's not going to keep his Best Feedback Icey very long. Tom and Willard on really on top of things.

[The Anarchist]

Thanks Judge, Tom for the feedback. I appreciate it (I also just noticed I hadn't posted my thanks yet lol oops). 

[Loki]

Oct 23, 2015 17:01:31 GMT -5 The Anarchist said:

Thanks Judge, Tom for the feedback. I appreciate it (I also just noticed I hadn't posted my thanks yet lol oops). 

You're welcome!