Dan Fierce "Monster" Series

[Nathan Saniti]

I was wondering if I could ask a few opinions. For those who aren’t aware, I write stories for a fictitious wrestling organization called WGWF, or World Global Wrestling Federation. Our stories are both part behind-the-scenes and part wrestling promotion. Judges grade our work on a weekly basis, and the winner of each “match” wins. As a writer, the following series (under my character named Dan Fierce) became my most successful to date. I have already gathered opinions from some as to why it went over so well, but I'd really like to hear others and get specific input. I won with each of these, except the last one. (I was going against Star, Vega$, Bliz, FuZz, amongst others who are legendary and much more capable than me, so I knew I didn't have much of a chance. LOL) I’m asking anyone who wishes to give me honest and constructive feedback, even if you aren’t part of our little writer community. Also, I encourage you to check the other writers out. They come from all around the world, all walks of life, and all backgrounds, as do their characters. So what I want to know:

Was it the story itself?

Was it the way the story was presented?

How about the trash talk?

What made them stick out?

What could I have done to improve them, especially the last one?

Warning: If I remember correctly, they were all about 20K (characters, not words), so it will be a long read. (No teal deers allowed.) The reason I'm asking is because I want to duplicate the success I had with this series.

***DISCLAIMER*** There is rough language and content that could be considered very offensive in nature, so if you are easily offended, then why are you friends with me to begin with? I mean, don’t read these.

Without further ado, whatever an ado is there won't be any more of them, here are the links.

Part 1
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Part 2
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Part 3
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Part 4
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Part 5
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[Grimm]

I'm really sorry, man, but I had to back out once I saw that enormous demon penis wagging to and fro.

[Eira]

Feb 28, 2013 16:48:56 GMT -5 Grimm said:

I'm really sorry, man, but I had to back out once I saw that enormous demon penis wagging to and fro.

Aaaaand now I'm going to go read them.

[Nathan Saniti]

Feb 28, 2013 16:48:56 GMT -5 Grimm said:

I'm really sorry, man, but I had to back out once I saw that enormous demon penis wagging to and fro.

You kidding me? LOL That's what INSPIRED the series! Besides... I promise that's the only time you'll see that picture.