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Post by Sadistic on Nov 18, 2014 0:23:15 GMT -5
I know I've been a real turd the past two shows about getting feedback up. I shall double my efforts!
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Post by Sadistic on Nov 18, 2014 0:45:34 GMT -5
"The Dark Arcana - Chapter 22: Exit the Fool, Part One" by Nathan Saniti
Perfectly timed story with the big finale coming for the PPV! I'm not sure, but I imagine anyone already competing in a match that wants to compete in the rumble with probably have to post two RPs. If that's the case, this is a grand first volley. Finally, the big showdown between an uncharacteristically(although it's been built up to slowly) pissed up Saniti and arch nemesis Rasputin! This piece seemed a bit of a detour from standard Saniti fare, replacing witty wordplay with an in your face match of biblical proportions. As always, the dialogue was well-done. I'm not sure if I missed the incident with Saniti's sister, or if it has yet to be revealed. Hopefully the latter. Regardless, I'm really curious what went down there. After some whizzing fireballs and lightning bolts, Nathan is about to put Rasputin out of his misery when...who in the hell just crashed the party?! Nice cliffhanger. Patiently awaiting Part Two. Entertaining read as always.
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Post by Sadistic on Nov 18, 2014 1:29:29 GMT -5
"The Dark Arcana - Chapter 22: Exit the Fool, Part One" by Nathan Saniti Perfectly timed story with the big finale coming for the PPV! I'm not sure, but I imagine anyone already competing in a match that wants to compete in the rumble with probably have to post two RPs. If that's the case, this is a grand first volley. Finally, the big showdown between an uncharacteristically(although it's been built up to slowly) pissed up Saniti and arch nemesis Rasputin! This piece seemed a bit of a detour from standard Saniti fare, replacing witty wordplay with an in your face match of biblical proportions. As always, the dialogue was well-done. I'm not sure if I missed the incident with Saniti's sister, or if it has yet to be revealed. Hopefully the latter. Regardless, I'm really curious what went down there. After some whizzing fireballs and lightning bolts, Nathan is about to put Rasputin out of his misery when...who in the hell just crashed the party?! Nice cliffhanger. Patiently awaiting Part Two. Entertaining read as always. Upon re-reading this RP, and your previous RP from Trauma, I think I now have a pretty good idea who the party crasher is...
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Post by Nathan Saniti on Nov 19, 2014 10:13:17 GMT -5
Thank you for the feedback, Sadistic. I will reciprocate wgen I get home. I have read yours, but my memory prevents me from being properly detailed about it. I'm thrilled you are enjoying the series. The part involving Saniti's sister was around the middle of the series and touched on here and there. I have a twist in mind that I think will catch everyone off guard, so keep watching for it. :-)
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Post by Nathan Saniti on Nov 19, 2014 18:41:11 GMT -5
As Promised:
The Black Hand : Origins
I liked this piece a LOT. It gives a history of the Black Hand (makes me wonder if this is an actual thing BTW), plus it shows Sadistic "recruiting". (Just exactly what did you do to that child for the brief time that changed him so drastically? InQuiring minds.) Color me interested to see where this story as a whole goes and if your fellow cohorts tie into it. (I personally like that.) The way you broke it up into pieces would normally be confusing to me, but you pulled it off nicely without getting the reader lost.
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Post by Sadistic on Nov 19, 2014 20:19:37 GMT -5
As Promised: The Black Hand : Origins I liked this piece a LOT. It gives a history of the Black Hand (makes me wonder if this is an actual thing BTW), plus it shows Sadistic "recruiting". (Just exactly what did you do to that child for the brief time that changed him so drastically? InQuiring minds.) Color me interested to see where this story as a whole goes and if your fellow cohorts tie into it. (I personally like that.) The way you broke it up into pieces would normally be confusing to me, but you pulled it off nicely without getting the reader lost. Thank you kindly. And it IS an actual thing. Google it.
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Post by Grimm on Nov 20, 2014 11:12:56 GMT -5
(Just exactly what did you do to that child for the brief time that changed him so drastically? InQuiring minds.) If he explained that, he'd get kicked out faster than you can say, "Mike Park set a baby on fire."
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Post by Nathan Saniti on Nov 20, 2014 12:21:47 GMT -5
As Promised: The Black Hand : Origins I liked this piece a LOT. It gives a history of the Black Hand (makes me wonder if this is an actual thing BTW), plus it shows Sadistic "recruiting". (Just exactly what did you do to that child for the brief time that changed him so drastically? InQuiring minds.) Color me interested to see where this story as a whole goes and if your fellow cohorts tie into it. (I personally like that.) The way you broke it up into pieces would normally be confusing to me, but you pulled it off nicely without getting the reader lost. Thank you kindly. And it IS an actual thing. Google it. I'm afraid to. I'm just a worker bee. They'll kill me to death until I die from it if they see me poking around.
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Post by Sadistic on Nov 22, 2014 14:16:29 GMT -5
"Wrestling with Demons" by Gem
When I saw the title, I immediately thought of Jake "The Snake" Roberts for some reason. Anyways...as always, another excellent offering from Gem. I think everyone is breaking out the heavy artillery for the PPV and this was no exception. The beginning of the RP told me something I already knew: LoKi is a deadbeat bastard. (Joking, Tom.) The character progression of Gem is wonderful as are her character interactions, be they real or imagined. Grant took something of the asshole role here before redeeming himself at the end. The thing I admire most about the conflict is the realism of it. The spat between Gem and Grant was something that everyone can relate to and drew on some very real emotions. And while the whole piece was great, I was especially intrigued by Gem's interaction with Father. I feel like more was gotten out of her imagined Father in that instance than the rest of her real interactions combined. Gem finally spoke to a stranger! Heyo! That interaction with imaginary Father had done wonders! Excellent character building. And what's the deal with Grant and his secret wrestling knowledge?! My only small gripe is Gem's use of foul language. It just doesn't seem right coming from her. I've always had such an innocent view of her and the swearing kind of taints it. Then again, maybe it's supposed to... Really enjoyed this, and as always, you've left the reader with enough questions to look forward to your next offering.
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Post by Sadistic on Nov 22, 2014 15:03:09 GMT -5
"What's good for the goose is good for the gander" by Grimm
Loved it! The implementation of the Black Hand in with the Tower of Babel was awesome! But that would mean that the Black Hand has been around almost since the beginning of mankind and is now responsible for the spread of humanity and diversity across the globe! Wonderful writing and the tie in to the Deadly Rumble was clever. This piece had good character(stable?) building with some more insight into the group's history as well as PCW and match relevance with Saniti. Excellent PPV piece and I feel bad for the grader for this match.
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Post by Sadistic on Nov 26, 2014 16:47:24 GMT -5
"Me & Misses Jones" by Derek Cosmos
As always, another entertaining read from the time traveler. I'll get my one gripe out first: I'm not a big fan of Derek the pervert and his sexual innuendos. Kinda a similar gripe to what I had with Gem and her swearing, I feel the same way about Cosmos. I've always seen Cosmos as outrageous and outlandish, but also a bit on the squeaky clean side. And now his innocence is ruined!!! Not really, though. I think it's hilarious that he still has a black eye. I'm curious where this romance between Stacy and Derek goes. Butt out, Seth! Love Derek's illusions of grandeur. I have to admit that the innuendos were funny, though. Another funny piece from Mr. Cosmos.
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Post by Derek Cosmos on Nov 29, 2014 16:07:27 GMT -5
"Me & Misses Jones" by Derek Cosmos As always, another entertaining read from the time traveler. I'll get my one gripe out first: I'm not a big fan of Derek the pervert and his sexual innuendos. Kinda a similar gripe to what I had with Gem and her swearing, I feel the same way about Cosmos. I've always seen Cosmos as outrageous and outlandish, but also a bit on the squeaky clean side. And now his innocence is ruined!!! Not really, though. I think it's hilarious that he still has a black eye. I'm curious where this romance between Stacy and Derek goes. Butt out, Seth! Love Derek's illusions of grandeur. I have to admit that the innuendos were funny, though. Another funny piece from Mr. Cosmos. Thank you for the kind words. How I see it, DC's still very outrageous and campy. He thinks he's much cooler, sexier, and confident than he actually is. But he isn't. At all. I am surprised anyone even finds him cute and funny-he's a bit whacked!
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 2, 2014 21:47:49 GMT -5
"Deadly Royale" by Andy D
This is one of my favorite Andy D RPs and quite possibly my favorite RP of the cycle. It was a sweet metaphor to the Deadly Rumble and its combatants. There was a cool Hunger Games feel to this and the representations of PCW's finest were pretty damn cool. There were even throwbacks to Lantlas, NCM's hobo army, and was that a reference to Los Dos Amigos that I detected? Excellent concept and execution and a very entertaining read. Too bad the dream had to end with the "asshole" skewering PCW's hero.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 2, 2014 23:10:44 GMT -5
"Savages: Dance now in the Fire" bt THE BEAR
Man, this piece had a little bit of everything. Psychological insight into Steel's childhood and why he's so messed up today. Even as a youngster he liked to mangle and mutilate! Switch to the present and the day old Taco Bell cracked me up. I wonder if the Bear finally put Piper out of her misery. Next we get another training segment with Omar with Omar simulating Crazy Boy. Brutal as always. I feel like the Bear gets more messed up in your RP than in any match! It's become a common theme. Jump forward to the ending and things really get colorful! First, I found it amusing that Othello went grocery shopping with his mask on. Just saying. Now who in the hell would kidnap the poor guy? And Ford paid you to skip the rumble...bastard!!! As always, good story and content. Just need to tighten up some sentence structure and grammar stuff. Otherwise, a very formidable offering.
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Post by Andy D on Dec 3, 2014 1:46:54 GMT -5
There was a cool Hunger Games to this Sigh... and here I thought I made what I based this off obvious. Also yes, that was a los dos amigos reference, I thought it was apt given who it was used on.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 3, 2014 9:40:32 GMT -5
"The Warden of Wayward Souls :: Chapter VII" by Stormm Been waiting for this bad boy! Now, will Stormm be able to crack the riddle? Just for the record, Main in Hangtown ain't that bad. And back to Sorrow's underground bomb shelter! Much like his opponent, Gem, Justin was visited by the ghosts of important figures in his life...even Gem! The writing was very well done and the next chapter in the novel delivered right on pace. I got an uncomfortable feeling as Michaels descended into the shelter. So the next clue will involve the contents of the manilla envelope and...Minnesota? The ghosts were an excellent way of pushing the story and including PCW items. Cliffhanger alert: Were the taps on Justin's window real or imagined? Guess I'll have to wait and see. Nicely done.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 12:28:22 GMT -5
"Malice And A Meeting" by Alexa Black
Aside from some grammatical/formatting issues, this was a pretty good RP. I REALLY like how you include PCW personnel in your work. I don't feel like many of us handlers utilize the PCW NPCs very often...I know I don't...so it's kinda refreshing to be reminded that they exist. One thing that made me laugh was how quickly Alexa offered to Miguel that she was out of money and a mental institution escapee. I also like how you reveal more and more of Alexa's backstory in each cycle. Nice inclusion of the Deadly Rumble and some of its participants. I'm curious if your focus on Derek Cosmos is going to lead to anything in the future. Solid roleplay.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 12:44:35 GMT -5
"The Dark Arcana - Chapter 22: Exit the Fool, Part Two" by Nathan Saniti I was really stoked to read this and see if my prediction came true. First, the font coloring REALLY helped with keeping the dialogue in order. It would have been fine without it, but the extra colors made it that much easier on the eyes. And the big reveal...wait, it's Tarrant? The rabbit? WTF. I guess I was way off on my prediction. Capslock FTW! Ha ha! Wait a minute... YES! I knew it! Nathan's sister, heyo! Ooh! The inclusion of the Black Hand fighting against Nathan, Naomi, and Rasputin was a nice touch. (Sorry for shooting your rabbit, BTW.) The "determination" play on words was great. This was an awesome finale! One mystery character was revealed, and it was a great reveal! But now there's another mystery character! Damn you! Anyhow, I'm once again left hanging until your next RP. Excellent stuff, my man.
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 13:04:21 GMT -5
"Into the Grey" by Whitey Ford
Likening Whitey to a soldier before the Normandy invasion was pretty cool. I was looking forward to some good old-fashioned "Asshole" Whitey Ford...and I got it! Whitey ripping the participants in the Deadly Rumble was pretty funny. This RP did a great job of portraying Whitey vs. the world and his acceptance of the lopsided odds. In fact, the PCW staff would suffer his wrath while Whitey questioned if Lantlas, Monroe, or Ace Anderson would try to stack the odds against him. That was a cool throwback, by the way. The sudden revelation that Ford doesn't care about the World title was a bit shocking. His attitude made it seem like he'd accepted the fact that he wouldn't walk out with the belt, but he'd take down as many other motherfathers as he could in the process. I really liked Whitey's dialogue and thoughts. They're written in a manner that just comes off as real. Another good RP by the former champ! Ha ha ha!!!
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Post by Sadistic on Dec 5, 2014 13:19:57 GMT -5
"A New King in Town" by Tyrone "Crazy Boy" Smith
I really liked how you built up the match and didn't tear down your opponent in this one. Love me some Crazy Boy! I also appreciate Crazy Boy putting the emphasis on the Underground and building it as an attraction. Kinda reminds me of the old Hardcore division in WWF back in the day. And if this is a battle of the truly hardcore, this is gonna be one badass fight between Steel and Smith! Your RPs always do an excellent job of portraying Tyrone the wrestler AND Tyrone the human being. The inclusion of your wife, Cassie, really helps with that. Tyrone's admission that he now has a family to think about and that he's now smarter in the ring with his actions was a nice touch. But...can we now call him Tyrone "Margiannly-Crazy Boy" Smith? I kid, I kid. Good stuff, Crazy Boy. Hope you and Cory Daddy have a brutal, bloody match!
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